Crust

[billy]

Hi alden. the firsdt thing i noticed was
crust
crust. which begs me to ask is the first line needed?

Crust

It is a threshold,
not a line,
that holds the totality
of solid earth
and ends the weightless chaos
of air. i like the opening stanza. it creates a good image of both sides. of the real world and the metaphorical turmoil and calm we have inside us.

Beneath the placid lie good enjambment
of endless pebble pulp,
dormant seas of fire
carry reckless rock barges great image
that collide and split
this imaginary
"line." This stanza sort of contradicts the first one but that's okay as it's made to feel solid

Is this so with time?

Does time slowly curve to meet itself again
in a semi-sphere, the earth is a sphere, not a semi sphere.
enfolding an implacable force?

This fool cannot help but ask: not sure if this and the rest of the poem works, it feels forced. i think the the implacable (good word choice) force would be a solid end to the poem.
How long can it keep?

How long will time
last?

i'm not sure time is as relevant as it's portrayed here, to a poem called crust. I suppose it plays a part on the metaphorical side of the poem but even then, it feels too disconnected. some of the images are excellent.

thanks for the read.