A haiku:
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(10-17-2012, 05:00 PM)billy Wrote:  as they promenade
ladies spin parasols-
I am mesmerised
Kewl - but if you're going for a traditional 'ku, your middle line is missing a syllable. Maybe 'their parasols'?

But if not, ignore this.
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A haiku: - by billy - 10-17-2012, 05:00 PM
RE: A haiku: - by just mercedes - 10-17-2012, 05:16 PM
RE: A haiku: - by billy - 10-17-2012, 05:37 PM



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