Over-salted

Over-salted

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10-17-2012, 09:28 AM

i like the edit a lot, only minor changes yet it has a finer clarity the other doesn't
the main part of the edit being the hanging section, the last two line have more power
in this version. good edit Geoff.
thanks for the read.

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Over-salted - by Philatone - 10-13-2012, 07:45 AM

RE: Over-salted - by billy - 10-13-2012, 08:13 AM

RE: Over-salted - by popeye - 10-13-2012, 09:05 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Lottie90 - 10-13-2012, 06:28 PM

RE: Over-salted - by just mercedes - 10-14-2012, 08:56 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Todd - 10-14-2012, 10:40 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Philatone - 10-15-2012, 02:48 AM

RE: Over-salted - by rowens - 10-15-2012, 03:25 AM

RE: Over-salted - by billy - 10-17-2012, 09:28 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Todd - 10-17-2012, 09:42 AM

RE: Over-salted - by just mercedes - 10-17-2012, 03:43 PM

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