Suit-wearer man

[Philatone]

hey chaotic

Mirror, mirror on the wall-
Who is the most untouchable...in terms of flow, this line felt a bit bogged down with too many syllables. the "the" could be dropped. on a side-note, are there degrees of being 'untouchable'?
And cushioned from fall?

'Cause bees and ants don't matter....could drop the "Cause"
I need the Chinamen in check,...the connection between bees, ants, and Chinamen i'm missing. maybe it's a bar joke?
Four metal doors for the gold bricks...need the "four"? not entirely sure of the significance. again, "the" doesn't feel needed--those 'gold bricks' are new information to me.
And cryogenics, is all.

Don't worry about defeated humane-ity,
My mirrored friend- nor the water;
Nor the fish-fleas nor the excuses
Drawn for embezzlement of the poor....this stanza is a bit direct and preachy ("don't worry...." is a tough way to start a line)

'Cause the world's for the strong,
Why- whoever can stomach it!
It's always been this way, mirror-
Of this I'm vehemently sure....for some reason, I'm liking this last line. in general, the connections between everything that happened in the piece escaped me

when I read this, I can't help but feel that this is a poem begging for a form. not too picky as to which, but I think some structure/ meter would work wonders and perhaps bring out this fairy-tale idea more. take a look at some of the practices leanne and other have done in the other sections of the boards; I think it could be a fun challenge to make this one conform.