10-12-2012, 08:36 AM
Hi musicalmyheart
i think it reads like a light to medium rock song. as a song i think it works well.
as a piece of poetry it works but not as well. mainly due to the clichés
the first stanza is okay. the 2nd you have one, the third is mainly cliche.
and so on. i like the way it drives you through each line.
i think it reads like a light to medium rock song. as a song i think it works well.
as a piece of poetry it works but not as well. mainly due to the clichés
the first stanza is okay. the 2nd you have one, the third is mainly cliche.
and so on. i like the way it drives you through each line.