Voices Reign.

[addy]

I like billy's suggestion. In its current format, the enumeration delays the point of the piece. We needed to get to the part about the mirror to contextualize the scene, yet the way its written now that's halfway into the poem already. I'd also prefer less repetition of the word beauty. For example, if you say "she sees colors like the sun and the moon", I think its clear already that she's looking at something beautiful

Thanks for the read