10-09-2012, 07:10 PM
(10-09-2012, 11:32 AM)Mr. Brown Wrote: Voices Reign,i think it would be a lot more powerful if you removed most of the early single word lines. or just have one line with all the words on to create a crowded effect.
Tall
Short
Skinny
Fat
Ugly
Unwanted,
She stands alone.
In a mirror,
She sees beauty.
Here and now,
She doesn't imagine the coke-bottle waist only attainable by purchase of the latest Barbie. not sure the barbie part of this line works
She sees beauty.
Colors like the sun and the moon,
The vast oceans to the unfathomable skies.
Here in the mirror, she sees beauty.
Until she opens her eyes,
And voices reign.
