Before the Last Volcano Spits Us Out

[Leanne]

There's no emotion involved
in taking people apart,
just instinct, an unknown pressure -- I'm not convinced that "an unknown pressure" serves any purpose; it's kind of implied throughout
and a human eye
to skin all that wavers before it.

Been skinning people
since I first saw bones protrude
from spines of almost innocent children. -- I wonder if "nearly innocent" might not serve, just for the sound value?

It's different when death gets on your hands,
soaks through your weak conscience
that has been pulped
by every hallowed mutt
that walked with enough flamboyance
for you to take notice. -- nice -- this is a strong, spat out and swaggering stanza that challenges the reader

We've become ingested by intelligence -- I can't help thinking that "we've become" weakens this by sounding preachy
and its unrelenting hunger:
it's when your heart beats
that couple of times more than usual
and your brain pisses
down your spine, and you think:
this is love,
this is true fucking hatred. -- yes! People always think love and hate are binary opposites... that's because they're stupid

We are not monogamous creatures
or herd or pack animals.
We get attached to people because
they are everywhere
and we like having us around. -- great insight

Men start growing this caged look behind their eyes
shortly after puberty opens its savage legs.
Women all start looking the same
with soft and hard dicks in their mouths
and the poor fucking kids are doomed
right from the beginning,
as were the many billions before them. -- "many" is probably redundant

Love, hatred, jealousy, sodomy,
all products of an over-developed brain
and the primal instinct to procreate. -- not sure that "sodomy" goes with "procreate"... not that there's anything wrong with it of course

We are a swarm of locusts
in a very old, small town
and there's a banjo player who's been watching
since long before forever playing the same chord
with two notes,
these notes are in harmony:
creation, extinction
and we're all dancing to it
whether you are aware or not. -- this last line feels too pat to me and I'm not sure what to suggest... maybe "whether you hear it/him or not"?