it seems i haven't changed, i scuppered the dark part of the poem and made it nicey nicy 
i was still pretty pleased with it because i think it's better now, guess i'm one of those happy bastards, which in a way is so fuckin sad 
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i think we've all took the nature, love, death beauty route or will do if we're new to poetry. it's part of the poetry learning curve. now i tend to try and see a happening, something that is just that, a something. most of the love, beauty, hate poetry is the opposite. it's about nothing. (well for me it is) i suppose i'm lucky that i'm immune to any pain or hurt poetry may hold. maybe i'm not a poet; i've had a poem make me cry or laugh but they've always been someone elses poem (though i have moronically laughed at my own now and again) i think i may be humble about poetry, i see many who are much better at it than i and think that i could learn something from them.
my tender and delicate is a penis spurting in someone's eye i'm so bad at delicate, mainly because i'm not delicate and i like humour. i often use drink as a stool, or should that be tool, in order to carry a poem. drink and farts. and unbeatable pair.
i was still pretty pleased with it because i think it's better now, guess i'm one of those happy bastards, which in a way is so fuckin sad .i think we've all took the nature, love, death beauty route or will do if we're new to poetry. it's part of the poetry learning curve. now i tend to try and see a happening, something that is just that, a something. most of the love, beauty, hate poetry is the opposite. it's about nothing. (well for me it is) i suppose i'm lucky that i'm immune to any pain or hurt poetry may hold. maybe i'm not a poet; i've had a poem make me cry or laugh but they've always been someone elses poem (though i have moronically laughed at my own now and again) i think i may be humble about poetry, i see many who are much better at it than i and think that i could learn something from them.
my tender and delicate is a penis spurting in someone's eye
i'm so bad at delicate, mainly because i'm not delicate and i like humour. i often use drink as a stool, or should that be tool, in order to carry a poem. drink and farts. and unbeatable pair.