Before the Last Volcano Spits Us Out

[MrA]

Billy that suggestion about swapping the first two stanzas looks like it works really well. Other suggestions are perfectly valid too so thanks for the time you took.

The title is just saying: this is humanity before it turned into the inevitable coal, oil and soil to be spat out of a volcano. Again, thanks.

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Hi MrA,
Where do I start?

Wow, what a great thing for any poet to have written. I am no expert by any means, but just on a personal level I felt so much from reading this just a couple of times. I lurk a lot, but I had to at least let you know that I am into this and will look for more of your work.

There is one line that I think may be extranneous:

We get attached to people because
they are everywhere
and we like having us around.

jmo

Thanks for sharing.

Well, thank you very much, Mark. I don't write like this often because I'm not sure of it's affects on people in general so the reactions here are quite reassuring and a good boost. I don't see any reason not to use your suggestion, it does need shaping up. Thanks again.

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A class poem, and what Billy says I see now, but didn't on my first reading, the suggested edits would work I think, and I got more involved each time I read it.

Why thank you, TOMH. Yeah I agree with Billy's suggestions and will snap to it when I'm able.
Again, thanks.