Promenading; A Social Activity
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A well-drawn vignette, billy, I definitely enjoyed this. Red and white colour motifs tie this together nicely, and of course there's the ever-present drink Smile

The alliteration is quite noticeable -- most of the time it works but occasionally it seems rather overdone, like "harder than hefting a pick haft" -- though I really like "piercing her primness led me to perdition".

I'll have a few more reads and come back when I've a little more time.
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Promenading; A Social Activity - by billy - 10-05-2012, 03:15 PM
RE: Promenading A Social Activity - by Leanne - 10-05-2012, 03:44 PM
RE: Promenading A Social Activity - by billy - 10-05-2012, 03:50 PM
RE: Promenading A Social Activity - by Aish - 10-06-2012, 03:29 AM
RE: Promenading A Social Activity - by billy - 10-06-2012, 06:51 AM
RE: Promenading; A Social Activity - by billy - 10-09-2012, 06:45 AM
RE: Promenading; A Social Activity - by rowens - 10-09-2012, 10:22 PM
RE: Promenading; A Social Activity - by billy - 10-10-2012, 06:47 AM



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