Critique this maybe?
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Perhaps I am bitter like a dark tea
Heated and steeped in a ceramic mug
Always seeming to let a little spill
Unexpectedly.

Perhaps I am bitter like a dark tea
That burns when sipped too soon or too quickly
In a ritual that is repeated
Nonetheless.

Perhaps I am bitter like a dark tea
Filled with gritty leaves that swim in circles
Feeling that they are only pollution,
Unnecessary.

Perhaps I am bitter like a dark tea
But no one would ever really know it
Because I am diluted and sweetened,
Hoping
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Messages In This Thread
Critique this maybe? - by ambustharp - 10-05-2012, 03:09 PM
RE: Critique this maybe? - by rowens - 10-06-2012, 01:26 AM
RE: Critique this maybe? - by Keith - 10-07-2012, 03:57 AM
RE: Critique this maybe? - by just mercedes - 10-07-2012, 04:19 AM
RE: Critique this maybe? - by billy - 10-07-2012, 09:39 AM
RE: Critique this maybe? - by Philatone - 10-08-2012, 12:31 AM
RE: Critique this maybe? - by heslopian - 10-21-2012, 12:49 PM



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