Our Time

[addy]

I really enjoyed this piece. Kids have great imaginations, and its a great feeling to recall. I enjoyed a lot of the little elements here ("running through fields and setting them on fire"). You have rhyming couplets, but you don't seem to be sticking to a meter... would've preferred one, personally, to complement the stream of nostalgia. For me you can also remove some of the "When"s introducing the couplets (like in S5 and S11), since the time frame is already established at the beginning of the poem and its better to let the action just flow from that point on.

Thanks for sharing