it's a little weak in places but you know what. i read it all the way through a few times and really enjoyed doing so.
one line i had some trouble with was
Took eggs to watery grave
i read watery as wart/er/ree; which gives it an extra half foot. other might read it as wart/ree though so i'd wait a short while. you can have a link in your signature if you wish but we're not too keen on having them in a post. (the site would get spammed to shit basically
i think as a piece of poetry it works well. the rhymes are good and the meter isn't that bad that it flows badly. because of the type of poem it is i was okay as well with the repetitions. it has a feel of the christian version mixed with a viking version. i enjoyed it Petteri
can you leave feedback on a poem or two so as to be fair?
thanks.
one line i had some trouble with was
Took eggs to watery grave
i read watery as wart/er/ree; which gives it an extra half foot. other might read it as wart/ree though so i'd wait a short while. you can have a link in your signature if you wish but we're not too keen on having them in a post. (the site would get spammed to shit basically
i think as a piece of poetry it works well. the rhymes are good and the meter isn't that bad that it flows badly. because of the type of poem it is i was okay as well with the repetitions. it has a feel of the christian version mixed with a viking version. i enjoyed it Petteri
can you leave feedback on a poem or two so as to be fair?
thanks.