(09-30-2012, 04:56 PM)Heslopian Wrote: A slowly turning face in a dark room,great poem jack. the reworking of the road to hell cliche felt like it fell short in quality in regards to the rest of the piece. does it need to be contrivances or would contrivance do?
like some terrible flower opening,
reveals the extent of a man's disfigurement. thats richard burtons pock marked face in the "villains" though it wasn't that badly disfiguredokay maybe not but it's a great image (okay, the villain in for your eyes only (james bond)
My favourite villains are always fucked up
by one of chance's games,
emerging from the wake of pain
with faces gouged. I can't love a madman
unless he's been hurt.
The road to evil is paved not with good intentions this feels too contrived from the real cliche
but a writer's contrivances; the soul of God
looking down and divining a crash.
A man's heart can be malleable,
changed beyond recognition by random hands.
And when like a flower he unfolds himself anew
you will see just dementia and pain. and joy if it's the joker
a worthy poem
thanks for the read
