09-28-2012, 10:04 AM
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Guest Room At The Old Persons' House
the stream of film references made me think of what was being said in the film forum
the narrative and images work really well. i like how the 3rd stanza contradicts the bravado of the 1st and 2nd. it has a very upbeat but nostalgic feel about it. all the iconic memories. i thoroughly enjoyed it. felt close to it in many ways.
the stanza below didn't work so well for me, did you mean no one in the 2nd line?
I loved many women in my dreams,
But none one made a bigger mess in my sheets
Than a truth I still wait
Makes of my life.
thanks for the read.
Guest Room At The Old Persons' House
the stream of film references made me think of what was being said in the film forum
the narrative and images work really well. i like how the 3rd stanza contradicts the bravado of the 1st and 2nd. it has a very upbeat but nostalgic feel about it. all the iconic memories. i thoroughly enjoyed it. felt close to it in many ways.
the stanza below didn't work so well for me, did you mean no one in the 2nd line?
I loved many women in my dreams,
But none one made a bigger mess in my sheets
Than a truth I still wait
Makes of my life.
thanks for the read.