Canvas of the Night

[elliottsmith]

There's too much punctuation so far in this one. 'In spite' with a comma after it gives the idea of spite before we make it to the next line. 'In spite' and 'despite' are used in the same way, but with the comma, 'in spite' brings out another meaning. Everything's locked up with those punctuation marks at the end of every line. I'll be back to say more. I'm being called away, against my will.

You were right, thanks. I've removed some of the punctuation.