09-22-2012, 10:53 AM
I really like your imagery, particularly ' inner Mississippi' and '(the moon falls. wing-broken)'. I don't like mornings either - the only part of the first stanza I didn't really understand was 'fetal shapes affix wings' though I love the way it sounds.
The form of the poem on the page allows it to be easily read.
I like the aside, as it were, of the line in italics - i wonder if the brackets were needed as well?
I really like the image 'violent priests' - not sure why! And yes, sometimes I scream too. Thank you for the read, I enjoyed.
The form of the poem on the page allows it to be easily read.
I like the aside, as it were, of the line in italics - i wonder if the brackets were needed as well?
I really like the image 'violent priests' - not sure why! And yes, sometimes I scream too. Thank you for the read, I enjoyed.