09-22-2012, 08:15 AM
no nits here. okay i have one nit. stanza 2 feels too personal. would it read better if you let the reader into the mic side of it and i suppose the the whole stanza?
other than that i really don't have any nits. each stanza holds up itself and presents some good vignettes. i like the constrict of the clock and how it pulls into such a short space, all thats been said.
thanks for the read
other than that i really don't have any nits. each stanza holds up itself and presents some good vignettes. i like the constrict of the clock and how it pulls into such a short space, all thats been said.
thanks for the read