Demons

[rowens]

At first I thought the critique "obvious cutter poem" meant 'cookie cutter poetry'; there's nothing wrong with writing a simple poem about your demons, or about Satan's demons. It's only that everybody's done it once, or many times. The scars and cuts seem all right, but are these your demons and is this your poem, or is this Satan's poem? Is it your Satan, or anybody and everybody's Satan that makes cuts and whose demons paw scars?---Have you trapped your demons in this poem, so others can see them and feel that they're real, or are you giving an account of second or third hand accounts of demons you might've overheard?---You can show the meat of these demons in a poem, and their venom leaking out of your emotional wounds. Something, not necessarily more gory, but something that lets people see the things creeping, lurking, burrowing, drooling, burning, snoring, melting, fuming, twitching, phasing, churning, multiplying, crawling, etc. Make the imagination hurt. Show why you had to get these demons out and put them in a poem.