09-12-2012, 10:39 PM
I made three new poems, and two alternate versions out of this one. I’m trying to merge the two.
It’s an organic thing, I like it to be open-ended, and subject to mutation. Like a magic spell that works on logic like a virus.
In the process of the original poem, the last four lines were made a good while after the rest. Usually you’d grab a last line like the end of a thread or an electric outlet that runs through the foundation, rewiring the whole thing. But here, only the last four lines are infected. I have to sit with the thing and tell it, “I have to punch out one of your eyes to put in a window so someone else can see.” Then I have to cut into it. But you can’t sedate a poem. If you can sedate it, it don’t work. But that’s me. I have the obsession to see a ’revision’ instead of an ’edit’.
It’s an organic thing, I like it to be open-ended, and subject to mutation. Like a magic spell that works on logic like a virus.
In the process of the original poem, the last four lines were made a good while after the rest. Usually you’d grab a last line like the end of a thread or an electric outlet that runs through the foundation, rewiring the whole thing. But here, only the last four lines are infected. I have to sit with the thing and tell it, “I have to punch out one of your eyes to put in a window so someone else can see.” Then I have to cut into it. But you can’t sedate a poem. If you can sedate it, it don’t work. But that’s me. I have the obsession to see a ’revision’ instead of an ’edit’.