09-11-2012, 02:50 PM
and i do agree and accept that. it's one of the reason this hovel was set up 
all along the poem was about the 1st person.
then all of a sudden it ends with angels and mammals.
But it was a fit for survival among the angels i just don't see any relevance of this line.
That led the mammal to its first word. and the continuation to this doesn't hold water on any level. it's all ended up with a christian type of reason why we began talking. while the use of hell in the poem worked well, the religious aspect inferred doesn't and of course that's just how i read it. hence i thought it a bit trite, and still do.
i don't see what you see because i'm not you, because you didn't allow me to see it (in the last two lines at least)
the feel that 1st person in the poem is comparing his cough to the beginning of language feels out of sorts he isn't fighting angels, he's fight his fears. or whatever emotional thing it is that's stopping him voice the words. i can't see that he sees those he stands before as metaphorical angels.
all along the poem was about the 1st person.
then all of a sudden it ends with angels and mammals.
But it was a fit for survival among the angels i just don't see any relevance of this line.
That led the mammal to its first word. and the continuation to this doesn't hold water on any level. it's all ended up with a christian type of reason why we began talking. while the use of hell in the poem worked well, the religious aspect inferred doesn't and of course that's just how i read it. hence i thought it a bit trite, and still do.
i don't see what you see because i'm not you, because you didn't allow me to see it (in the last two lines at least)
the feel that 1st person in the poem is comparing his cough to the beginning of language feels out of sorts he isn't fighting angels, he's fight his fears. or whatever emotional thing it is that's stopping him voice the words. i can't see that he sees those he stands before as metaphorical angels.