09-11-2012, 12:41 PM
i have no nits. and it has many sentiments i agree with. the first stanza works really well because it's you about you.
all well and good on it's own but it would soon get tedious. you seem to have covered that base by bringing our own imagination into the frame. what makes it really good is that lots of people will disagree with you. you have that extra dimension or real participation. what a wanker the Christian believers will say. the non believers will be nodding their heads in agreement.
while addy finds truth in the line she mentioned, other will find heresy
personally i see a bit of truth,
thanks for the read. liked the narrative
all well and good on it's own but it would soon get tedious. you seem to have covered that base by bringing our own imagination into the frame. what makes it really good is that lots of people will disagree with you. you have that extra dimension or real participation. what a wanker the Christian believers will say. the non believers will be nodding their heads in agreement.
while addy finds truth in the line she mentioned, other will find heresy
personally i see a bit of truth, thanks for the read. liked the narrative