09-10-2012, 10:51 AM
wasn't keen on the first part of the 'I" but enjoyed the rest.
2 and 4 i thought were really good. 4 almost excellent
III was perfect, even if you did have an actual III
i think something this long will get people you like or dislike parts of it but the fact is, it's a good piece of poetry, a very good piece or poetry and a line by line would serve no purpose. in parts it's poignant, the last three lines are an example of that. the sadness in the piece isn't that harsh sadness, it's subtle and feel factual.
thanks for the read, i will be reading it a few more times.
2 and 4 i thought were really good. 4 almost excellent
III was perfect, even if you did have an actual III
i think something this long will get people you like or dislike parts of it but the fact is, it's a good piece of poetry, a very good piece or poetry and a line by line would serve no purpose. in parts it's poignant, the last three lines are an example of that. the sadness in the piece isn't that harsh sadness, it's subtle and feel factual.
thanks for the read, i will be reading it a few more times.