09-07-2012, 06:12 PM
Nice opening couple of lines and the middle verse is pleasingly quirky. As for the rest, well I guess you had to be there.
"I'm homme francais with English lungs" would sound nice but maybe that ruins the last line of the poem. I can't tell.
Oh no! not this again.--- - too short a line.
Ray
"I'm homme francais with English lungs" would sound nice but maybe that ruins the last line of the poem. I can't tell.
Oh no! not this again.--- - too short a line.
Ray
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.