09-06-2012, 06:17 PM
Never heard of a kyrielle before. I like this, Billy, the way it addresses a problem tangentially - I think. Don't know how well the cigar sits with the biscuits and crackers.
3rd and 4th verses very nice, you maybe need something stronger than a comma after "veins of blue".
Do you rhyme shades with charades when you speak?
Ray
3rd and 4th verses very nice, you maybe need something stronger than a comma after "veins of blue".
Do you rhyme shades with charades when you speak?
Ray
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.