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apathy
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09-06-2012, 01:09 AM
The first verse is better than the second. The atlas image is intriguing and it's capped perfectly by a funny joke. The second verse feels a bit more bland. I'd recommend switching the order or deleting that verse altogether. JMHO of course. Thanks for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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RE: apathy - by rowens - 09-06-2012, 12:54 AM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-06-2012, 08:48 AM
RE: apathy - by heslopian - 09-06-2012, 01:09 AM
RE: apathy - by addy - 09-06-2012, 09:00 AM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-07-2012, 05:43 PM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-14-2012, 05:38 PM
RE: apathy - by addy - 09-15-2012, 08:39 AM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-16-2012, 09:26 AM
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