09-03-2012, 02:22 AM
I think it is an interesting balance of crafted stoicism and rawness. "Call me now or call me not again" and "To worship you again risks thrice denying,
more than enough to halt my further tries" sounds like a poet writing a poem. And "that is all it was.
All it ever was?" and "Now I see….I never owned this love at all" reads like you're cutting the personal experience down to size, exposing the delusion of the poetry of it. And that's most likely your intention, and it comes through very believable, and relatable.
more than enough to halt my further tries" sounds like a poet writing a poem. And "that is all it was.
All it ever was?" and "Now I see….I never owned this love at all" reads like you're cutting the personal experience down to size, exposing the delusion of the poetry of it. And that's most likely your intention, and it comes through very believable, and relatable.