09-01-2012, 02:21 PM
I do like to say that I was being somewhat of a prick in some of my poems. Like this one. Preachy, yes. Another is that I'm talking to someone specific. Which can make it quite tedious unless the reader gets off on hearing someone get publicly scorned, which isn't likely in some cases. The pleasure not being strong enough, ain't that the truth, in this case, that's why it's botched. I know I'm defending a lot of what I write. But I take all of what everyone tells me into consideration. I do annoying stuff on purpose, like even stuff that annoys me, like saying "dirt-like", and "gulp after gulps". Why, because there's a bit of guilt in here too. And I need to come off somewhat like a preachy prick. I don't ever think that I'm trying to pull one over on the reader, only giving the reader the sense that I'm struggling to make sense of things myself. These poems are far from perfect as they are, and I'm working harder on some other poems that I hope to share. But I do like some of these imperfect ones because they helped me through some terrible times.
"like-dirt". See, how it annoys me. I meant to say "like-dirt". As the poem says.
Something very powerful for me is the way poor, uneducated, southern black people used to talk. Theyd add words where they dont belong, add an 's' to words like i did with gulp, and the double triple negatives. And had so much attitude and music to it. People call it sass or jive, but whatever you say about it, I dont think it sounds uneducated at all. Just another kind of education.
"like-dirt". See, how it annoys me. I meant to say "like-dirt". As the poem says.
Something very powerful for me is the way poor, uneducated, southern black people used to talk. Theyd add words where they dont belong, add an 's' to words like i did with gulp, and the double triple negatives. And had so much attitude and music to it. People call it sass or jive, but whatever you say about it, I dont think it sounds uneducated at all. Just another kind of education.