09-01-2012, 12:42 AM
I guess it depends on what the reader wants. In an earlier reply you told me I diminished the mystique when I elaborated on meaning. I said 'fusion' was a good description of my take on poetry, because you used that word describing something else. But immanence is better. But that's poetry in general; so never mind.... These are the things I wanted to get feedback on, what's been said so far in the replies. Now I was wondering is it a stretch to link the 'you' of the first stanza with the 'woman', and see the whole poem as addressed to that 'woman', when it says "Not old enough to drink: To see into the eyes of a woman, Grown, with pain...", when she, or her life, has been placed in a cup, or vessel, by the speaker? As the speaker, her spirit, is lamenting that she has loss touch with that silly "child that lies within"?