Beyond

[Philatone]

hey rowens

the biggest thing that stands out to me is that i'm having trouble connecting with some of the images put forward. some examples:

And I can smash the cup to the ground;
And lick it up that way.

here, I'm not sure what you are licking up exactly; semantically, i imagine it is whatever is in the cup, but the syntax (sentence itself) suggests that the speaker is licking up the smashed cup

I darken my face with emotion:

this escaped me as well in terms of knowing exactly what it means

Where pale skinned vampires eat but don't swallow

The soul of the music,
Foisted on them by the villainy of the clowns that love too much.

again, i'm bogged down keeping track of everything. the metaphor (or what I take to be one) flows into yet another metaphor of "clowns"---this is getting heavy. I think simpler, shorter lines and some trimming could make this piece more accessible for me; i apologize if i may be missing the point