inspiration

[addy]

This is a seriously excellent write. Anything I say will just be minor nits. You've always had a sensitivity to your writing, but you seem to be in full force with this one. Great job.

and sometimes I love the open-ended intro. It works smartly with the piece
when I would be doing other things,
I write words inside my head.

I write words for you as I inhale,
words for you as I exhale.

I write because of your warm hand, the way it felt on my shoulder
I write so I will not close my eyes, and lean back into that comfort
I write so I can leave without reassurances. Very tight write so far

I write the words so they brush lightly across the page, touching sightly; I write til I can lean into their comfort.
till the rasping of my pen on this page calms me
till the blank space is filled with words
and within words, I can relax and breath. This line is a tad weak compared to the others...

you, as I inhale
you, as I exhale

and if
I write for long enough, I will not want to
lean back and rest against your body,
place my head by your neck, close my eyes and breathe.

instead
I lean into words,This is the fourth time leaning is specifically mentioned (it was brought up in S3, S4 and S6) and it is getting mildly repetitive. into the rasping of pen on paper, into the large letters curving across my page
here, in these words, I rest and close my eyes. I think this is a strong ending, and you don't need the final couplet. Just imho though, a matter of taste

I inhale and
I exhale.