Edges of the Wind (trying a form poem)

[billy]

Hiding in the corners of the evening,
sheltered by the edges of the wind, i like the image here though i think it needs an extra foot, 'and' at the beginning would be a suggestion.
searching for that something to believe in, 'while' would add that extra foot though i'm not sure at the meter. also verges on cliche.
searching for the will to live again. 'i'm' maybe help again with the extra foot but still not wise enough to help with the meter.

In the coldest corners of November i like the line a lot.
when Autumn seeks her shelter in the ice, good personification
there I'll find a reason to remember,
the beauty of the shadows cast at night. i know there's an extra foot here but it feels right, this is a good verse.

Whatever the reason that you chose to give no need for 'the' as it adds an extra foot
up the empty beauty where you hide, another 'beauty' doesn't do you any favours, it's also a foot short and the enjambment feels off.
It was there i knew the reason that I lived
remembering the shadows cast inside. 2nd 'shadows'

But in the beauty of the ending day a third beauty
on faithless tides i watched you slip away. nice ending couplet

i'm not a meter expert but i think you have a problem in general. it seems to start at the very beginning. the first word is a trochee, DUM/da then you move straight to an anapest, da/da/Dum and finish with an amphibrach, da/Dum/da

iambic pentameter would read as
da/Dum da/Dum da/Dum da/Dum da/Dum

your first line reads as;

Hid/ing/ --in/ the/ corn/ers/ of --the evening,
Dum/da/--da/da/Dum/---da/da/--da/Dum/da

while i may have got some of it wrong it basically gets you off on the wrong foot (pardon the pun) i know you can mix trochee and iambs etc but it's like mixing a cocktail. it works best if there's a recipe.
the meter needs a looking at by others better at it than me but in places it breaks down. some of the end rhymes only just squeeze in as broken or slant but some fail, (wind/again)

you may not think it when you look at the feedback but i think you did a brilliant attempt and the the Shakespearian sonnet.
and if it's your first attempt it's even better.

there's a bit of trouble with the meter and line length but in general it's uncluttered from cliche bar a an odd one. the repetition needs mending but that's it, by any standard this would be recognisable as a sonnet.
the aim now should be to improve and try a few more