08-20-2012, 09:38 AM
these last moments diluted,
forever flow.
if you remove any lines like the ones above you'll tighten the poem up
allow to use it's own lungs as it were. often these sort of lines restrict a good poem.
the edit is a big improvement, now you need to trim away ate the bindings.
forever flow.
if you remove any lines like the ones above you'll tighten the poem up
allow to use it's own lungs as it were. often these sort of lines restrict a good poem.
the edit is a big improvement, now you need to trim away ate the bindings.