08-20-2012, 09:08 AM
I have to admit, I'm struggling a little with this one. I quite liked the read. But that last stanza had such a gravity to it (especially that last line) that I felt wasn't completely justified by the established story. Or perhaps I am being unfair, since this is from the perspective of a child, and as such even a small mistake could seem like the end of the world.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?