08-17-2012, 01:28 PM
hey billy
i would agree, this is a shortie that could use even less. agree about the "at home", and I would add that you could delete the "for but"
for being so short, i think it's pretty decent. perfectly captures a brief moment in time using a small amount of words
i would agree, this is a shortie that could use even less. agree about the "at home", and I would add that you could delete the "for but"
for being so short, i think it's pretty decent. perfectly captures a brief moment in time using a small amount of words
Written only for you to consider.