I Live Over There

I Live Over There - revision

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#11

08-16-2012, 06:42 PM

I prefer the comma in the last line, I tried speaking the poem out loud and I think the pause works well here.

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RE: I Live Over There - by tectak - 08-14-2012, 04:48 AM

RE: I Live Over There - by billy - 08-14-2012, 08:37 PM

RE: I Live Over There - by penguin - 08-14-2012, 11:36 PM

RE: I Live Over There - by tectak - 08-15-2012, 05:31 PM

RE: I Live Over There - by billy - 08-15-2012, 09:16 AM

RE: I Live Over There - by penguin - 08-15-2012, 06:22 PM

RE: I Live Over There - by billy - 08-15-2012, 08:06 PM

RE: I Live Over There - revision - by Universalchild - 08-16-2012, 06:42 PM

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