I Live Over There - revision

[tectak]

Thanks, Phaedra. "falling asleep to the new bedtime stories" - I'm mostly thinking anything in the Daily Mail.

Thanks, Tectak. Parents spit at children, in the metaphorical sense, that's what I mean. Deporting the darkies - well, we do, though not in the numbers some people would like. What I intended was for the phrase to run on from twittering gossip, as in talking about deporting the darkies. It's a fair point you make. I don't want it in quotes or italics so I think I'll change it - deploring the darkies, abhorring the darkies. Whaddya think?
I see what you mean about the gerunds. I'll be, er, rethinking.

"This stanza reads as if once upon a time...there was a rhyme scheme. The End" - I don't understand the comment. First two lines rhyme....then no more....the end

I got the germ of the poem while walking the dog in the snow. Originally, the snow was more conspicuous in the poem but the dog shit was less conspicuous in the snow.It's the little things that start me off.