08-14-2012, 07:33 PM
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I don't know how I feel about the title. I think the word crimson throws off the rythym a little because of the accent being on the second syllable. Maybe that's just me being hard on myself. What are your opinions?
Operation: Filth Removal
A half day of labor, a half day of sleep
Split by a scalpel designed to slice deep
Blood gushes out and it runs down my skin
I’m opened up while the surgeon digs in
Deeply infected, but feeling no pain
Just a warm numbness that’s keeping me sane
The culprit removed from under my skin
Leaving a mess of my liquid crimson
Prepared to be stitched, cleaned up and wiped down
My flesh being pierced, I don’t hear a sound
She covers the wound and I am set free
Filth was deleted from inside of me
© Frankie Ocean 2012
A half day of labor, a half day of sleep
Split by a scalpel designed to slice deep
Blood gushes out and it runs down my skin
I’m opened up while the surgeon digs in
Deeply infected, but feeling no pain
Just a warm numbness that’s keeping me sane
The culprit removed from under my skin
Leaving a mess of my liquid crimson
Prepared to be stitched, cleaned up and wiped down
My flesh being pierced, I don’t hear a sound
She covers the wound and I am set free
Filth was deleted from inside of me
© Frankie Ocean 2012
I don't know how I feel about the title. I think the word crimson throws off the rythym a little because of the accent being on the second syllable. Maybe that's just me being hard on myself. What are your opinions?