08-13-2012, 12:27 PM
the edit's an improvement, specially the first line in the last stanza. that said the last line of poem feel lumpy (for want of a better word) it just feels like a foot or a syl is missing.
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Going to the Country -revised
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Going to the Country -revised - by penguin - 08-07-2012, 05:24 PM
RE: Going to the Country - by billy - 08-09-2012, 11:45 AM
RE: Going to the Country - by billy - 08-10-2012, 06:40 AM
RE: Going to the Country - by penguin - 08-10-2012, 11:15 PM
RE: Going to the Country - by billy - 08-11-2012, 08:38 AM
RE: Going to the Country - by addy - 08-11-2012, 08:51 AM
RE: Going to the Country - by penguin - 08-12-2012, 08:40 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by billy - 08-13-2012, 12:27 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by addy - 08-13-2012, 12:30 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by Philatone - 08-13-2012, 02:40 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by penguin - 08-13-2012, 06:27 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by Philatone - 08-13-2012, 11:35 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by tectak - 08-17-2012, 09:13 PM
RE: Going to the Country -revised - by penguin - 08-17-2012, 10:52 PM
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