08-11-2012, 05:59 PM
i like the changes in the edit.
the 2nd stanza is a lot cleaner with more depth and the whole piece in general has a much tighter feel.
the last 3 lines of the poem tie the piece up with a good image. history can only ever be...a smear
good edit Alden
the 2nd stanza is a lot cleaner with more depth and the whole piece in general has a much tighter feel.
the last 3 lines of the poem tie the piece up with a good image. history can only ever be...a smear
good edit Alden