The perfect match

[billy]

V. 2

The perfect match

keeps to a book
as her sisters, one by one,
leave the house, isn't that sexist ?

a scent of ash,
pulses of shadows
unraveled on the roof.

The red-head sleeps
until a cough of thunder,
a search for candles i like this stanza.

and a storm, who paints
the porch and steps
into the living room and this is a good image.

to invite her out
to dance, hesitant
to blow a single

kiss. MWAH

much prefer this version. the end is excellent. the only single nit i have in the 'a scent of ash' line. whose scent is it.

some great images and good (i think) anthropomorphism, or personification of a match. i can't believe she's female

good strong edit.

thanks for the read.