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The perfect match
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08-04-2012, 07:06 AM
Don't see anything wrong with the enjambment myself.I like the 1st verse but I agree that the 5th line is weak. I lose track of the poem after red-head, having assumed it's about possessiveness. So I wonder why "wait for the storm". Again, I think the last line is weak.
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.
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The perfect match - by Philatone - 08-03-2012, 08:30 AM
RE: The perfect match - by parakleseos - 08-03-2012, 01:26 PM
RE: The perfect match - by tectak - 08-03-2012, 03:46 PM
RE: The perfect match - by billy - 08-03-2012, 06:41 PM
RE: The perfect match - by penguin - 08-04-2012, 07:06 AM
RE: The perfect match - by Todd - 08-04-2012, 07:31 AM
RE: The perfect match - by Philatone - 08-05-2012, 05:19 AM
RE: The perfect match - by Ruth - 08-05-2012, 06:34 AM
RE: The perfect match - by billy - 08-05-2012, 11:04 AM
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