your hands (version 2ish)

[Ruth]

perhaps I'll just have two different poems :-)

I was trying to make longer line lengths and take out the cliches, but I see all your points here. That's my problem, I don't think I'm confident enough with my own voice to say, this stays, and this I can change. Must work on that.

thanks so much!! I really do appreciate the feedback (fyi - the streetlight/candlelight stanza took me FOREVER..... and I still don't like it, just illustrates how expertly I can chase my own tail)