07-30-2012, 09:57 AM
hey penguin!
like the delivery on the topic, the flow was strong as with the word choices and rhyme overall.
at times, some spots struck me a bit as filler and as having an extra syllable or two. that being said, i felt the rest of the content more than made up for any of those; it's well written. i think it's true power would be as a spoken form.
like the delivery on the topic, the flow was strong as with the word choices and rhyme overall.
at times, some spots struck me a bit as filler and as having an extra syllable or two. that being said, i felt the rest of the content more than made up for any of those; it's well written. i think it's true power would be as a spoken form.
Written only for you to consider.