because of your hands

[tectak]

because I looked at themdaring opener without defined subject. "them" is just to isolated and reliant upon the title
and not your face,
your hands,
the floor, my feet, but mostly atalways a bit dodgy to include feet as there is a risk of comedic effect when not wanted. leave feet out of it. Also knees and elbows
your hands

and so, not required as there is no loose conditionalty. You have dealt with the "because" in S1
I saw the line suggesting
a creative lover,
one that shows
a clever mind,
fertile imagination, and
the mound by your thumb
that indicates passionpunctuation a little clumsy here. Not sure if a semi colon after "imagination" wouldn't help.

covertly why covertly? Why not overtly? Why any ertly? This adds nothing. Cut it.
I read the meaning of your finger shapes
long and articulate,
the depth of your spiritcliche 1
as you moved your hands, and spoke softly to mecliche 2

my own hands were shakingcliche 3
as I rocked
ever so slightly, back and forth

and as I write, I tremble
briefly
at the memory of your hands

overall a little intense and over concentrated. The format is not languid or sensuous enough for the subject matter. Short lines usually implies short thoughts and you are not in a staccato theatre here. You are trying to express a longing emotion with a machine gun. You are writing free verse so it is up to you to begin and end your lines where you like AFTER the thought has been made manifest. Think short by all means, most of us do, but then write long.
Best,
tectak