07-29-2012, 12:16 PM
(07-29-2012, 10:36 AM)Indie Wrote: I'd love to hear this read aloud/spoken/recorded, to understand the inflections of voice better. Right now I find the repetition really jarring as well where you end some of your lines, they read very cut off, yet I understand the artistic structure of this and that jilted internal dialogue we all sometimes have.Ah, that's excellent feedback, thank you. I hear it very softly in my head (the internal dialogue), but the inflection doesn't necessarily translate. perhaps I can figure out a way to record it. thanks very much.