important things

[billy]

I don't write,
write poems, I'm taking this reiteration style as being used to show more an introspection than a statement, it works well throughout the poem
anymore.

I used to. i like the far away feel you're creating in the first few lines.
write them
a lot, now
when I want to write about your mouth, and
how your lips would press, and the words were held
behind your teeth
or, years later how
my first taste of loukoumades I had to google it, great tasting word
created a sensation in my mouth that made
my knees bend, and that when I put my fingers
on my lips to lick them, great image here and the line above
I thought of you.

thought of why I used to,
used to write about
the important things,
like the shape of your mouth
and the sensation of honey on my tongue, and
old wishes for us.

then I remember,
remember how
you wouldn't look into my eyes
or touch me
unless you had to, and that,
and that, it was as if
you were afraid.

I don't write,
write poems,
anymore, because my words,
all of them, were for you, and
now I think I should
keep them,
keep them, for myself.

my spell check says any more though they're infamous for being wrong...but that's just a weasly nit because i like it all

there's a melancholic feel to the poem, specially at the end. but there's also a feeling of looking inward on oneself. i the like the stutter (for use of a better word) throughout the poem to emphasise and /or stop the reader so that they can actually think about what they're reading. it has good imagry and originality in the telling of an old emotion.

sorry i couldn't give any neg constructive feedback which might help improve it; the truth is, i can't see any.

thanks for the read.