07-28-2012, 01:25 PM
hey raymond
i think you pack a lot well in this short piece.
one idea i had was to eliminate the "the influence of" and perhaps shorten the ending, but neither is necessary. a pleasant read, thanks for sharing
i think you pack a lot well in this short piece.
one idea i had was to eliminate the "the influence of" and perhaps shorten the ending, but neither is necessary. a pleasant read, thanks for sharing
Written only for you to consider.