07-27-2012, 12:25 AM
Hello Katy. I take it there's 3 separate poems here. If so, you might have done better to post them separately. I like the first one. It's short, sweet and makes its point well. Maybe could be shorter
Papers on the floor.
Books for learning
And all is due…
I only want sleep.
The 2nd, I like the rhyme of autumn with important but the poem doesn't seem to have any focus. As for the 3rd, you really need to check your spelling.
One example
Your silly arms are deff and bitter vines. - deff?
Papers on the floor.
Books for learning
And all is due…
I only want sleep.
The 2nd, I like the rhyme of autumn with important but the poem doesn't seem to have any focus. As for the 3rd, you really need to check your spelling.
One example
Your silly arms are deff and bitter vines. - deff?
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